7 messages in org.freebsd.freebsd-docRe: New Handbook Section for Review -...| From | Sent On | Attachments |
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| Daniel Gerzo | Jan 31, 2012 2:49 am |  .diff |
| Benedict Reuschling | Jan 31, 2012 12:37 pm | |
| Warren Block | Jan 31, 2012 12:58 pm | .diff |
| Niclas Zeising | Jan 31, 2012 1:04 pm | |
| Warren Block | Jan 31, 2012 1:07 pm | |
| Daniel Gerzo | Feb 5, 2012 4:11 am | |
| Warren Block | Feb 5, 2012 7:41 am |
| Subject: | Re: New Handbook Section for Review - graid3 | |
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| From: | Benedict Reuschling (bc...@FreeBSD.org) | |
| Date: | Jan 31, 2012 12:37:59 pm | |
| List: | org.freebsd.freebsd-doc | |
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Am 31.01.12 11:49, schrieb Daniel Gerzo:
Hello everybody,
A new Handbook section covering graid3 is now available for review; the patch is attached.
The text is based on PR 164228. A built version is available at http://people.freebsd.org/~danger/geom-raid3.html.
Comments are welcome.
Hello Daniel,
thanks for doing the work on this PR. I've reviewed the patch. Overall, it looks good, but I would enhance the following section a bit:
+ <sect2> + <title>Creating Dedicated <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 Array</title>
I would write "Creating A Dedicated <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 Array" since it is also mentioned in the text like this.
+ <note> + <para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from + <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, such configuration + is not common and is not advised. As such, this section + does not provide description of how to accomplish such + configuration.</para> + </note>
How about reducing the "such" word count in the last sentence? How about "... of how to accomplish this kind of configuration." or "... this type of configuration." ?
Regards
Benedict Reuschling FreeBSD Documentation Committer
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